Subject: Now Yall Know...... damn SNAKES Fri Dec 05, 2008 3:38 am
Darkness surrounds me Or is it lack of light No sound, no smile, no love Just black frost bites I feel something sinister lurking in the dark What is it? Is it trying to kill me Or trying to break free It's back again! Those creepy footsteps I feel the eyes, watching my every move STOP!!! Turn around There stand the Silhouette of so called "friends" Hiding daggers behind them Yeah! Now i finally see Or is it just that New Life? Nah!! "MORGAN" has died......
GET OVER HIM AND MOVE ON!!!!
PAPoUCH Super Elite Lv2: Jr. Vet
Number of posts : 1860 Age : 37 Mood : Points : 298 Registration date : 2007-10-12
Subject: Re: Now Yall Know...... damn SNAKES Fri Dec 05, 2008 11:48 am
Great poem, I must commend you. Your poetry skills keep getting better and better.
The two last lines "Get over him" "and move on" is somewhat wrong. I think your friends, if they are true friends, will find it hard to just move on. Friends normally stick to the end no matter what happens.
SexyKammy Super Elite Member
Number of posts : 1716 Age : 41 Mood : Points : 169 Registration date : 2007-07-30
Subject: Re: Now Yall Know...... damn SNAKES Fri Dec 05, 2008 5:53 pm
You have a dam right to put it in a color so i cant read it but i highlighted it so i see you what saying now. One advoice to you, if you have a problem with someone you call friend say it to their faces be a man a bout it. Been a hypocrite dont pay. I anit calling you one im just saying it dont pay.
iBlacknite2.0 Veteran Member Lv3: F***ing Heavy Poster!!
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